Saturday, 2 June 2012

'Yes, No, Oh, all right then' - Romantic Friday Writers Challenge No 37 - Friday first June 2012

Welcome to Romantic Friday Writers Challenge No. 37 for Friday first June 2012.

RFWers is a fortnightly challenge that is founded by and hosted by and Donna Hole.

Here is my text:
There will be a sequel at the end! 

For little Jimmy Hacquinn's ninth birthday party, his single-mother, Carola, fulfilled his wish to have a pirate-theme-party. The cake was draped with black marzipan and the Jolly Roger. Apple cider was served as pretend-rum.

Everything was going to be fine, thought Carola, until Jimmy announced that he found a real pirate to help him cut the cake.

'Yes, no, yes, no!' said Carola when Jimmy begged to let this man into their home.

'He is highly recommended at the amateur theatre', pleaded Jimmy, 'The lady at the ticket office gave me his phone number.'

Carola was often surprised by her son's initiative ability. But this time she thought it was a little dangerous to let a stranger into their home. 
'He said he'd be here in time for when I blow the candles out.'

Carola telephoned the theatre and asked about 'Captain Cedric for pirate-themed parties'.

'Oh, Cedric? He's such a dear', assured the woman who sold tickets, 'No, you won't be disappointed.

'Ding-dong', the doorbell rang, and Jimmy's classmates filed into the living room  dressed as tiny cut-throats with three-cornered hats, eye-patches and plastic swords.

At last, everyone sat at the dining-room table admiring the cake. 

'Ding-dong' again. Carola went to the door. Cedric the pirate had arrived in authentic-looking pirate clothes with a real parrot perched on his shoulder.

'Shiver my timbers', said the bird, before Cedric could open his mouth. 'Hello, my name is Cedric. Are you Mrs Hacquinn?'

Yes, I am, but please call me Carola, when you don't need to be in character. Yes, no, oh alright then, thought Carola and let the man and the bird in.

'They're all waiting for you', said Carola surprising herself. She liked the look and manner of this man. He had kind eyes.

'Cedric entered the room where the cake was ready with lit candles. 

'Be you James Hacquinn, matey?' he asked Jimmy, 'And all of nine years old today?' 

Jimmy nodded.

'Well then, let's see you blow all of yer nine candles out!' 

Jimmy took a deep breath and blew as Carola snapped pictures with her telephone-camera. Then Cedric lead the children in several rounds of 'Happy Birthday to you' in a voice that made Carola melt.
Word count according to WordCalc: 377

[Text copyright 2012 Christina Wigren, All Right Reserved]


Best wishes,

First Commenter:

Heather Murphy 




Heather Murphy said...

Oh, I wanted to know more about what happened with Carola and Cedric! Great build up here :)

Denise Covey said...

Hi Anna. For a rushed story you've got many elements in it. I loved the pirate references (especially since I just watched Pirates of the Caribbean again last night!) Loved the parrot and the 'shiver my timbers' too. And you managed to get the words in!

Thanks for taking the time to post amidst the dreaded tax!


dolorah said...

Yes, letting a stranger into your house can be frightening; but we can't always say no to birthday party fun. How cool Jimmy went out and found his own surprise. Great use of the prompt words Ana :)

Thanks for joining in the RFW fun. And good luck with your "closet Swede's" project.


The Poet said...

Dear anna,
Even though it was left to the reader's imagination, I am sure there was an attraction between The Pirate and the Mum. Great story my dear. Thanks for sharing.

Tina said...

MORE! This is a great set-up and I think you should make it a short story and submit it to a magazine! It's that good.
I have an award for you, but the post about it goes up Tuesday, Just wanted to give you a heads up.
Thanks so much for including me in your "Closet Swedes" links. I really appreciate the advertising.
Funny, I came here to tell you that there was going to be a link on Tuesday, and find myself also being linked!
Tack så mycket!
Tina @ Life is Good
Post A-Z Road trip!

Scheherazade said...

It's a sweet story, Anna. I like the little tingle of tension about inviting a stranger to the birthday party. And I think maybe it's an opportunity for a little romance.


Francine Howarth said...

Hi Anna,

Good sense of scene setting! A little tension, uncertainty yet air of possible love interest between the Pirate & Mom. Nicely penned. ;)


Kiru Taye said...

Hi Anna,

I love the touch of romance in this tale. I'd certainly want to know if Carola and Cedric get it together. I hope to read more soon.


Charmaine Clancy said...

I like the premise for this story, you've taken a very different spin on it.
Wanted to know more about Cedric :)

Charmaine Clancy said...

I like the premise for this story, you've taken a very different spin on it.
Wanted to know more about Cedric :)

Denise Covey said...

Dear Anna
I'm around again gathering for my post about the posts! About the Closet Swede project. Does it count if I'm absolutely nuts about Abba? My fave, fave group of all time! I even emulated them with my satin jumpsuits!


Sally said...

The single mother's dilemma as to whether to trust again. I loved your sentence 'he had kind eyes.' You can tell a lot from a person's eyes.

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