Saturday, 1 January 2011

A bicycle ride - Mrs. Jenny Matlock's Saturday Centus Week 35



Jenny Matlock

(Scroll down to the end to read the instructions for this meme)
Here is my SC Week 35-text:

[It's Sunday, January 2nd, and I have written a second version of this SC. Scroll down after reading the first version, if you haven't already read it.]

Writing her New Year's resolutions, the phone rang. The court-appointed attorney had found a lawyer willing to wait for payment.
Yippie! She wrote his name and number on the same paper as the resolutions and put it in her pocket.
Dressing warmly, she rode her bike to the high street and locked it. Nothing was open, but window-shopping was an inexpensive passtime. She wanted to write more on her list, but couldn't find it in her pocket.
What was the name of that lawyer?
Returning to the bicycle, she found her crumpled up list of resolutions, lying in the snow.
Wonderful, now I can get started.

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Word count according to WordCalc: 100

This fictional text is, unfortunately, based upon real life. There is an obvious flaw here. A court-appointed lawyer would not call on the telephone on New Year's Day, which is a holiday all over the world. The phone call came in the middle of a weekday many weeks ago. But the paper with the name and telephone number did fall out her pocket and onto the snow by her bike. It came out when she pulled out her keys to lock the bicycle. This is not a perfect centus. I could change the time frame back to earlier or let someone else make the phone call, but still, she is the one who has to decide about all of this, so that would not work. Oh well, take it as a writing exercise!

This is a second version of this SC-text, I am trying to correct the flaws that I found in the first version:

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She wrote: Be nice... Don't date guys that are... The phone rang as she crumpled the paper.

"Hi Mom, Happy New Year!" -- "I know."-- "Don't be. Got great news! That attorney called." -- "The guy that is supposed to be neutral." -- " He gave me the name of a lawyer who is willing to help and wait for payment." -- "I'm going to... on Monday." -- "But if you didn't like him, why didn't you say that?" -- "Bye... love you too..."

She picked up her crumpled up list of resolutions, flattened it out and added: Don't believe promises that are not in writing...
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Wordcount according to WordCalc: 93
(I had to hand count also because Wordcalc thought the dashes respresenting what the mother said over the phone were words!)


Best wishes,

Anna

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This is Mrs. Jenny Matlock's instructions:
Happy New Year! I decided to go ahead and post a Centus for those that wish to participate this week. I haven't visited last weeks yet, but rest assured, Grands are going back to school this week and I will get caught up with everything! I won't get into all the mushy New Years sentiments here on this post, (you can read those by clicking here!) I look forward to a 2011 reading more of your wonderful work!
Welcome to week thirty-five of Saturday Centus. STOP! If you didn't read the end SC's from last week, please take a moment to do so. Just work backwards until you find out where you left off. I feel really bad that the people at the end don't get read. Thanks! Now on to regular SC biz...In case you've forgotten... This is a themed writing meme. You can use UP to 100 words to tell your story. The prompt does not count for your 100 words AND it must be left intact in the body of your story. As a special New Years gift, though, you can use illustrations this week if you are so inclined. Your story can be fact or fiction, just keep it PG, please! You have the entire week to link your work to the meme and you can link more than one story if you like. Please display link button or just a hyper-link back to Saturday Centus. Be careful to link your SC URL to the Linky and not just link to your main blog. I would suggest that since these are so short, if you can't think of a title just use your blog name as the title in the Linky. Try to visit each one because there are some amazing writers participating in this meme. Since the links are so short they are also a fun and quick read. Please e-mail me directly with ???'s or ask your question in a comment and I will do my best to get back to you as soon as possible. This week the prompt is: "Her crumpled up list of resolutions..."

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