tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post8508682828472123781..comments2023-08-14T16:10:38.074+02:00Comments on Adornments for Dreams: RFW Challenge No 43 - August 24th 2012 Romantic PicnicAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-14571599205002355482012-08-28T09:11:24.832+02:002012-08-28T09:11:24.832+02:00It's interesting how you captured the picnic i...It's interesting how you captured the picnic into the reunion between Paul and Jenny and their kids. Wonderful story!<br /><br />Thanks for reading and commenting on mine too.Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15640511681168230116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-54952622915509150042012-08-28T04:49:10.089+02:002012-08-28T04:49:10.089+02:00Dear Anna,
Back for a second reading. You know, I ...Dear Anna,<br />Back for a second reading. You know, I have to say this outright...you have come so far since you were first introduced to RFW. Like Elen, I know English is not your first language, but you've stuck with it and write like a pro (smile). I am not good at storytelling like so many of you and I'm always amazed how these stories can be crafted in so few words. I hope there's a happy ending in store for Priscilla in the future. <br /><br />LOL at Charmaine's comment about the toilet paper roll!The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-63324704553138167802012-08-27T05:39:37.778+02:002012-08-27T05:39:37.778+02:00Anna I have no doubt you'll be able to create ...Anna I have no doubt you'll be able to create a full size novel from this piece. I wouldn't be too happy to return from being stranded for four years to find out my husband was going to give our kids away - he probably hasn't even replaced the toilet paper roll properly since she's been gone!<br />I'm in team Jenny, hope she gets her kids, gets happy and dumps hubby... on a deserted island.Charmaine Clancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18059559142070140041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-39518994707823175502012-08-26T20:49:24.052+02:002012-08-26T20:49:24.052+02:00I'm hoping that Jenny does get a chance to be ...I'm hoping that Jenny does get a chance to be a mother to her daughter again. Haven't been following, but from the story, I guess Jenny was missing for a while. J.L. Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05666634455836834179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-6305476888794583642012-08-26T13:38:17.391+02:002012-08-26T13:38:17.391+02:00
A deliciously complex and interesting take on the...<br />A deliciously complex and interesting take on the picnic. Enjoyed reading it, and the background too. Very nicely woven together, feels very real.Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-16074468383724034552012-08-26T08:37:48.257+02:002012-08-26T08:37:48.257+02:00I look forward to the next part. You've got me...I look forward to the next part. You've got me hooked in now. <br />Thanks for visiting my blog.<br />Suzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05337531041006701719noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-77209723350606354222012-08-26T04:09:16.179+02:002012-08-26T04:09:16.179+02:00Anna, you're doing a masterful job of putting ...Anna, you're doing a masterful job of putting this story together using the prompts. It is developing wonderfully. It is very poignant that her daughter Sarah doesn't recognise her mother, but that is true to life. How confusing for the little girl, with not enough maturity to work through this. She needs time and experience. It provided a good contrast to have Colin, the older son, be more accepting, being more mature.<br />A difficult situation but one that needs to be faced.<br />Yes, more food please!<br /><br />Don't forget to come back to RFW if you'd like to vote for your favourite entry this week. Go with your gut. Really should be someone who kept to the word limit and has a romantic element! Poll will go up Monday AEST.<br /><br />Thanks for entering! We made our 20 goal!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-43199989892127588382012-08-26T01:50:34.641+02:002012-08-26T01:50:34.641+02:00I must agree with the overall consensus, this stor...I must agree with the overall consensus, this story should continue. Life isn't always perfect and we as writers must write about all aspects of life the good and bad.<br /><br />Nicely written, Anna.Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-51793601091197755082012-08-26T01:21:35.610+02:002012-08-26T01:21:35.610+02:00My dear friend,
What a great writer you are!!! Chi...My dear friend,<br />What a great writer you are!!! Children should never be lied too and should always know the truth about their parents. I will have to jump on the bandwagon like everyone else and say...you MUST continue this.The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-70064376329130431272012-08-26T00:43:45.016+02:002012-08-26T00:43:45.016+02:00well i loved it Anna,but you know i feel and would...well i loved it Anna,but you know i feel and would love to be waiting for the second part,what would happen after coming back from the picnic and how they gonna deal with each other,<br />i really loved itAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08807379993272964636noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-63177439442072775442012-08-25T23:09:40.727+02:002012-08-25T23:09:40.727+02:00Dear Ann : You write very good and I liked all ...Dear Ann : You write very good and I liked all the sentences and the end. Thank you for your advice I´ll try to do what you said. Kiss Elen Elen Lackner-Poemas de amor. - Pianohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04335967868559873522noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-56786668478177934932012-08-25T20:41:37.193+02:002012-08-25T20:41:37.193+02:00Poor sarah.. and I know it's breaking Jenny...Poor sarah.. and I know it's breaking Jenny's heart.. but such is to be expected in a situation such as this.. She'll come around.. Good luck to you on your novel and I'm really glad that you're turning this into something bigger. I wish you great success on this!! C.S.Hhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06931727241982253089noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-69040158903313042102012-08-25T16:39:02.083+02:002012-08-25T16:39:02.083+02:00I have enjoyed reading this story from the beginni...I have enjoyed reading this story from the beginning Anna. I feel the children's pain in this section. How confusing that would be! I look forward to what you have coming nextHeather Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11847855601653718033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-42357538637017176352012-08-25T14:55:24.128+02:002012-08-25T14:55:24.128+02:00I agree with Donna. There is scope to develop the...I agree with Donna. There is scope to develop the plot of your story with twists and turns before a happy ending. I hope you can develop it into a novel. I have enjoyed reading and going by the comments here, I'm not the only one. All the best with the project, Anna. And of course, please keep us posted. Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-24514066651160893852012-08-25T10:58:05.920+02:002012-08-25T10:58:05.920+02:00Hi Anna, another great continuation of the saga - ...Hi Anna, another great continuation of the saga - with lots of issues still to be resolved. It won't happen overnight or on one lovely picnic but it's a good start. I hope all the characters can find peace in some way. I feel for everybody. Sallyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-48196692077889196482012-08-25T06:11:06.595+02:002012-08-25T06:11:06.595+02:00Ana I hope you do continue this story as a novel; ...Ana I hope you do continue this story as a novel; you have a good start with lots of intriguing character plots, romantic tension, and an excellent overall plot of whom should Paul choose for his future - the past or the present.<br /><br />......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-11540353708091858582012-08-25T01:09:18.268+02:002012-08-25T01:09:18.268+02:00Dear Tanya,
I agree with you whole-heartedly. Chil...Dear Tanya,<br />I agree with you whole-heartedly. Children should know their roots. Colin does. But Sarah was only two when her mother disappeared, and it was Sarah herself who started calling her aunt 'Mummy'; it was not something that Julia encouraged, but she did not correct her because she thought that it fulfilled an emotional need. Jenny was presumed dead, so it seemed alright to let her do this. But her brother, Colin, never did. Colin never lost faith in Jenny and hoped for her return, which would not have been so good in the long run if she never returned. <br />This detail about Sarah calling her Aunt Julia 'Mummy', is taken from a real life situation that I know well. In a family where the mother was in and out of a mental hospital, her three-year-old son started calling his grandmother 'mummy', because she was the one who provided him with love and security. In this story, Sarah is only four years old and does not remember her real mother, Jenny, very clearly.<br />I am using my own children as models when it comes to what they can remember and what they forget.<br /><br />One of the main points of my story is that no one does anything really wrong. No one is really a villain, but it is still a sad situation.<br /><br />Yes, it is easy to be infuriated with Paul and his sister. But I think Paul takes the easy way out because he has a hard time handling his grief. Julia's problem is that she really wants to adopt these children since she is unable to have children of her own. So Julia has a special cross to bear.<br /><br />Thank you so much for your comments!<br />oxox<br />AnnaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-31167492842020350202012-08-24T22:53:15.554+02:002012-08-24T22:53:15.554+02:00This is such a good instalment...I am sad for both...This is such a good instalment...I am sad for both Jenny and Sarah for the situation they have been put in and infuriated at Paul and his sister for never being honest with Sarah and keeping her 'Mother' alive for her. I believe children should always know there true roots!!Tanya.https://www.blogger.com/profile/08436595615435609755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-12758371183077395152012-08-24T22:13:44.578+02:002012-08-24T22:13:44.578+02:00Dear Sulekkha,
Thanks for reading and for your enc...Dear Sulekkha,<br />Thanks for reading and for your encouragement.<br /><br />Dear Roland,<br /><br />Your comment means so much to me. <br /><br />Your texts inspire me, and your 'author-ghosts' remind me that we have so much to learn from great writers from the past.<br /><br />And also, the little I know about your biography, tells me that you know a lot about finding a measure of peace and love when life only seems to offer disappointment.<br />Thank you and bless you, Roland.<br /><br />Dear Nancy,<br />Thanks for the pep-talk. I'll be sending you a longer version of this story that ends on a little less sour note. <br /><br />Colin never loses faith in Jenny. Against all logic, he felt certain that she would one day return. <br /><br />Dear Maddy,<br />Thanks for reading and commenting!<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />AnnaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-41140796607226257652012-08-24T21:33:26.299+02:002012-08-24T21:33:26.299+02:00Hi Anna, this is a touching scene full of emotion ...Hi Anna, this is a touching scene full of emotion and complexity.<br />MadeleineAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-52907657112989019482012-08-24T20:52:24.165+02:002012-08-24T20:52:24.165+02:00Hi Anna
Life is complicated and you gave us a sour...Hi Anna<br />Life is complicated and you gave us a sour taste of a difficult situation. Keep writing, nothing makes us better than pen to paper or fingers to keyboard. Nice job.<br />NancyN. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-30880245273254171692012-08-24T14:57:55.231+02:002012-08-24T14:57:55.231+02:00Sometimes life doesn't give you happy endings....Sometimes life doesn't give you happy endings. You must do what you can to find some measure of peace and love. Good entry, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-24175796469230281042012-08-24T13:19:03.829+02:002012-08-24T13:19:03.829+02:00Intriguing story, enjoyed reading it.Looking forwa...Intriguing story, enjoyed reading it.Looking forward to your novel.sulekkhahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06022718430683943561noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-80860189290000327972012-08-24T11:08:56.211+02:002012-08-24T11:08:56.211+02:00Dear Francine,
Thanks for asking.
No, Priscilla i...Dear Francine,<br />Thanks for asking. <br />No, Priscilla is not disappearing from the novel. She and her roommate, Charlotte, take a trip together, just for fun. I am letting Charlotte tag along as a watch-dog so that Priscilla does not fall in love on the rebound, as Rek suggested that she might be in danger of doing.<br />Best wishes,<br />AnnaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-47255668232845388262012-08-24T08:37:45.157+02:002012-08-24T08:37:45.157+02:00Hi Anna,
Oooh, lovely and fitting end to the Jenn...Hi Anna,<br /><br />Oooh, lovely and fitting end to the Jenny story. Poor Priscilla, but is this the end for her? ;) <br /><br />best<br />F Francine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.com