tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post1105462965945399422..comments2023-08-14T16:10:38.074+02:00Comments on Adornments for Dreams: RFW - Challenge No. 42 - 'I need a change'Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-36910475704520583902012-08-22T19:28:08.770+02:002012-08-22T19:28:08.770+02:00I'm loving the way this story is unfolding and...I'm loving the way this story is unfolding and how you are giving it from each characters perspective in different formats...can't wait to find out what comes next...will we be getting something form the child??Tanya.https://www.blogger.com/profile/08436595615435609755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-86613269013931861262012-08-12T22:37:50.940+02:002012-08-12T22:37:50.940+02:00I want to wring Paul's neck for being such a ...I want to wring Paul's neck for being such a @%$#@#$#. Good story. Yup, Priscilla needs a change--especially if Paul can't figure this one out. Thanks for sharing your lovely story.Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-44222753298266009592012-08-12T00:02:16.356+02:002012-08-12T00:02:16.356+02:00Hello dear Anna. Despite your hectic summer holida...Hello dear Anna. Despite your hectic summer holiday trips away, you have valiantly continued to write your story. Well done! I love how you've given each of your characters a chance to put forward their POV. As a novel this would work using the multiple POVs but you have to be so careful to do it properly or it gets confusing. I'm so glad Nancy is going to help you. You are a good storyteller Anna, but like all of us it's good to have help with structure and other general things that make our story better.<br /><br />This is a very unfortunate situation for Paul, Jenny and Priscilla, but one that will need to be resolved. I'd love to see Paul and Jenny get back together I say weepy eyed!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-22699325112510026302012-08-11T23:11:26.432+02:002012-08-11T23:11:26.432+02:00Dear Anna,
You know quite well that we all feel so...Dear Anna,<br />You know quite well that we all feel sorry for Priscilla. She deserves more and someone better...in my opinion. I read your post and know that such experiences do exist. We will wait on the edge of our seats for more my friend. Well done!!The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-47749925883079714322012-08-11T22:30:14.297+02:002012-08-11T22:30:14.297+02:00This is shaping up to be a nice love triangle. So...This is shaping up to be a nice love triangle. So many things to consider; I like how nobody is entirely in the wrong, its just complicated. This is a story of life. The romance is tragic, but something to empathize with.<br /><br />Well done on the characters, and their respective POV's of the unfolding events. I like the style.<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-72943930768670644072012-08-11T19:26:52.414+02:002012-08-11T19:26:52.414+02:00Anna, I love this story and I love how you have ad...Anna, I love this story and I love how you have added the diary entries. I can't help but feel sorry for Priscilla.Heather Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11847855601653718033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-65225373214705858492012-08-11T13:53:57.479+02:002012-08-11T13:53:57.479+02:00So Jenny knows that Priscilla is back on the scene...So Jenny knows that Priscilla is back on the scene. What a creative use of form...love the diary entry. Can't wait for the next chapter in your captivating series, Anna. You really should consider making this into a novel. Well done!Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-58405378023146970582012-08-11T12:32:24.055+02:002012-08-11T12:32:24.055+02:00Good one, well written...Can't say who is at f...Good one, well written...Can't say who is at fault...no one and everyone I guess. What if she had returned after seven years he would be remarried with a child?<br />While he waited for her for 4 years, the fact that he loves someone else means his love for Jenny won't be the same as before. Will their marriage work...hard to say. <br /> Pricilla has done the right thing to give back the ring but she could use the time to see if they have a future together rather taking someone on a rebound.Rek Seshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13484322426994645221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-16233025769057335112012-08-11T09:22:44.460+02:002012-08-11T09:22:44.460+02:00Nice piece and exactly 400 words. Sounds like your...Nice piece and exactly 400 words. Sounds like your MC has made the right decision doing what is right for her realising that what she might be getting from such a relationship a making a choice.<br /><br />I've discovered my Internet Explorer doesn't like your Blogsite, so I have logged in via my Google Chrome account to comment.<br />regards, MadeleineAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-77728834206331330362012-08-10T19:30:43.838+02:002012-08-10T19:30:43.838+02:00Hi Anna
This speaks of a novel...I think it is. In...Hi Anna<br />This speaks of a novel...I think it is. Intriguing. I enjoyed how you incorporated the theme, 'I need a change,' into your story.<br />Nancy<br /><br />PS. I'm back and will be happy to help you with your critique needs now. Since I'm offering help on my blog as well you will need to let me know if you want private or public help.N. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-9710409602515131882012-08-10T16:55:02.858+02:002012-08-10T16:55:02.858+02:00Hi Anna, It works really well as exerpts from her ...Hi Anna, It works really well as exerpts from her diary - she is much better off without him (in my humble opinion). I hope she finds somebody much better. I've loved reading the on-going story.Sallyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-32830086961296399522012-08-09T15:02:27.983+02:002012-08-09T15:02:27.983+02:00I love how you have once again continued the story...I love how you have once again continued the story with Jenny and Paul and Priscilla. I like how right at the end she says, "I need a change." Excellent use of this weeks theme! Gonna try to get my entry done tonight if all goes well! Stupid writer's block has hit me and I'm having a hard time! Grrrr! LOL! It was a really great post Anna! Keep it up!!C.S.Hhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06931727241982253089noreply@blogger.com