tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post2031936721396014333..comments2023-08-14T16:10:38.074+02:00Comments on Adornments for Dreams: Response to Image - The Audition - Romantic Friday Writers Challenge No. 35Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-58842282160786845942012-05-07T12:02:48.563+02:002012-05-07T12:02:48.563+02:00Hi Anna,
I love your take on the prompt. I love t...Hi Anna,<br /><br />I love your take on the prompt. I love the way you've made Daisy instantly loveable, the reader empathising with her use of English as a secondary language. I also love that you've added a sequel giving her a happy ever after. It's the romantic in me. LOL.<br /><br />Well done.Kiru Tayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-69584041809402482662012-05-06T23:23:01.983+02:002012-05-06T23:23:01.983+02:00Hi Anna,
Sorry I'm late getting around this w...Hi Anna,<br /><br />Sorry I'm late getting around this weekend...<br /><br />Loved this, such a fun piece! It was inevitable "stage" scenarios would come from this prompt...And you did Daisy proud... ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-86389665960403746272012-05-06T06:23:46.383+02:002012-05-06T06:23:46.383+02:00Forgot to tell Donna:
Maybe seven years is too lon...Forgot to tell Donna:<br />Maybe seven years is too long. Maybe Daisy should only have been in the U.K. two years.<br />When writing a first draft, there is a lot that doesn't work or is not logical. Daisy needs to be very young. If she lived in the UK seven years she is too old. <br /><br />Just a thought.<br />AnnaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-65381316254343712472012-05-06T06:19:26.571+02:002012-05-06T06:19:26.571+02:00Dear Denise,
Thank you for the encouragement. I w...<b>Dear Denise,</b> <br />Thank you for the encouragement. I wrote the sequel after reading Linda's comment. Daisy might work in a short story or two. Now that I've given her an English sort of maybe boyfriend, I might be able to write more about her adventures in the UK. Makes me want to take a trip to 'follow Daisy's steps...'<br />-----<br /><b>Dear Linda,</b> <br />Thank you for your honesty. Thanks to you I did write a continuation that gives Daisy some real hope. Peter is a nice guy that I has loosely based on my nephew Lars.<br />-----<br /><b>Dear Donna,</b><br />What a good reader you are; as well as writer. We both are working with a similar theme in our stories: protagonists who har trying to become someone else. Daisy, from Sweden, is trying very hard to be English.<br />-----<br /><b>Dear Tanya,</b><br />Thank you for commenting. Your visits always make me happy. I am happy you like the second ending. I like it too. But it was Linda's comment that got me going so that I actually posted it, inspite of going over the word-limit.<br />-----<br /><b>Dear Andy,</b><br />Thank you for your thoughts on Daisy's behalf. But Daisy and Peter were not seeking the exact same parts. In my story, I am assuming that there are many girls who want to play the part of Julia, but few boys who dare to even try out for the part of Romeo. The theatre company had to promise Peter a part because there were so few boys to choose from. The girls seeking Juliet's part were a dime a dozen. So Peter is not actually taking Daisy's part from her. If I can get Peter to play Romeo, he can practice with Daisy, and then when the girl who gets that roll is taken ill, guess which understudy gets her big break? Daisy!<br />-----<br /><b>Dear Tina,</b><br />Thanks for visiting! You are so welcome to join. In fact I was just going to ask you if I could feature one of your 'Postcards from Sweden'-posts on my blog for the next time. I'll get back with you for more about this.<br />-----<br /><b>Dear Nancy,</b><br />Thanks so much for your comments. I don't know how foreign I want to make Daisy. I have heard young Swedish people really speak impeccable English. But then there are so many who don't. If you are pretty enough maybe you can do it. Look at Greta Garbo or Ingrid Bergman. But they were often cast in parts where it was okey to have a little accent. Greta Garbo's Nanutska (spelling?) is a good exemple. It didn't use to bother me, but I don't really like Ingrid Bergman's filmer anymore. She is the typecast Swede.<br />I was interested to compare Guy Pierce playing George VI's brother who had to abdicate. It sounded right, at least to me, and then he speaks this Australian English when he is interviewed about what it was like working on <i>The King's Speech</i>.<br /><br />I don't want Daisy to sound as Swedish as Arnold Swartzenegger sounds Austrian. I never had trouble understanding his speech, though, but that probably says more about <b>my</b> English than his!<br /><br />I love your expression 'The Laundrywoman from Hell'! Maybe I can use that as a title for a murder mystery based on her character! Actually, I tried to delete my comment about the trouble I have with some of my neighbours, but it was too big. I could not click on the 'delete-button', so I had to leave it, even if I thought that it was a silly comment.<br /><br />I was at the store yesterday ordering my washing machine for the bathroom. But it will take another ten workdays before they can deliver it. They offered 20% off sale on their products this weekend and were flooded with customers.<br /><br />Bad news from the tax people. I won't have time to rewrite the story about Edwin Kloow until I get my returns sent off.<br /><br />-----<br /><br />Thank you all, wonderful people for your support and kindness to me.<br /> <br />AnnaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-39303349886502043642012-05-05T21:52:08.044+02:002012-05-05T21:52:08.044+02:00Hi Anna,
I enjoyed this story of a struggling act...Hi Anna, <br />I enjoyed this story of a struggling actress. Your description of Peter is great using a visual reference like 'David.' <br /><br />On the side I had to smile. I was very young when Arnold Swastznager (I'm no good at spelling) first appeared in the Conan movie. I remember how hard it was to understand him. I didn't think he would do well, look at him know. Lots of movies, governor of California and if he had his way he'd be President of the USA. Fortunately it's illegal for him to run. You have to be born in the USA to be President.<br /><br />No worries on your comment about the Laundry Woman from Hell. I am so glad you have the backbone to do something about it.<br />NancyN. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-53026463491270922352012-05-05T20:05:28.163+02:002012-05-05T20:05:28.163+02:00This picture/prompt writing challenge seems like a...This picture/prompt writing challenge seems like a really fun group! I might have to hop on board next time. Although I do have a serious problem about being brief...hate word limits, but they sure are a good exercise for your writing muscles.<br /><a href="http://kmdlifeisgood.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Tina @ Life is Good</a>Tinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08925730745204736744noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-81263409040751277802012-05-05T19:34:31.343+02:002012-05-05T19:34:31.343+02:00Dear Anna,
Isn't it great to be back with RFW?...Dear Anna,<br />Isn't it great to be back with RFW? I too wrote everyday for both A-Z & Napowrimo, but it's just not the same.<br /><br />I really enjoyed reading this. I think I prefer the second ending better...it has the element of romance we're supposed to include. I did feel bad for Daisy though...she let David/Peter go ahead of her when he was way late and he got the part instead. Let's hope something good happens to her. Nicely written. Thanks for sharing.<br /><br />I'm hosting <a href="http://thoughtsofbeautyinthestillnessofdawn.blogspot.com/2012/05/blog-hop-saturday-050512.html" rel="nofollow">Blog Hop Saturday!</a> today. You're welcome to link your blog, OR a specific post OR your Fan Page...the choice is yours. Linky will stay open until 8:00pm EST (Eastern Standard Time). Hope you can join the fun!The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-33082182135852883772012-05-05T19:29:14.653+02:002012-05-05T19:29:14.653+02:00I'm so glad you wrote the sequel for us to see...I'm so glad you wrote the sequel for us to see as I really was disappointed when it came to the end of the story...and I would love to read the next bit and see where you take it if you decide to go ahead and write it!!Tanya.https://www.blogger.com/profile/08436595615435609755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-20134653336587081482012-05-05T13:06:37.740+02:002012-05-05T13:06:37.740+02:00Hello Anna. I'm so glad to be back and reading...Hello Anna. I'm so glad to be back and reading your stories. And to go and write a sequel! As Donna says, you don't have to explain everything to us. Readers must use their imaginations too! I think you could put this together, write some more, then you'd have a great short story to submit somewhere.<br /><br />Thanks for writing for us Anna.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-35046257860850291342012-05-05T04:28:29.330+02:002012-05-05T04:28:29.330+02:00Hi Anna; welcome back to the RFW :)
Your original...Hi Anna; welcome back to the RFW :)<br /><br />Your original excerpt was very well done. I liked the short insight into Daisy's life; you showed her career choice, her youth, gave a sense of how foreign she is through another's eyes, and even showed a bit of self interest when she wouldn't share her insights with the other girl.<br /><br />I'm glad you put the explanation of how the text came about after the writing; I could see how you integrated all those thoughts and feelings into the text. I liked knowing I was "getting" what you were trying to portray in the writing.<br /><br />I enjoyed the epilogue excerpt too. Always a pleasure to see how things turn out; and I especially liked the romance flow. Both work well as stand alone's.<br /><br />Sometimes Anna, its good to leave a reader with questions - like what happened to #15 and does she ever get a part - and to allow the reader to want to read further if it is part of a larger writing, or to make up their own endings.<br /><br />And the other good thing that comes of excerpts like these two, where there are so much possibility to explore the characters (both characters are well developed) and the story potential for your own future writings. I can't tell you how many times a prompt such as this has sparked a short story concept; and a lot of times the reader feedback on what they "wondered" about is exactly what helps me build a situation to write about.<br /><br />One thing I can always count on in your writings Anna; it doesn't seem to matter what the prompt is, you come up with something unique and engaging for me to enjoy.<br /><br />Thank you for returning to RFW and posting such a marvelous - two marvelous - excerpt to the prompt.<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-67060857420550052512012-05-04T06:15:10.492+02:002012-05-04T06:15:10.492+02:00Hi Anna,
Oh, I so wanted Daisy to get the part and...Hi Anna,<br />Oh, I so wanted Daisy to get the part and I'm so sad for her. If you are not going to give her the part, then you must at least give her some bit of justice or happiness.Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1712353207460785993.post-35522905585789289672012-05-04T01:32:28.095+02:002012-05-04T01:32:28.095+02:00Hello Anna! I've missed you! I hope you enjoye...Hello Anna! I've missed you! I hope you enjoyed the madness of the April challenge. It certainly claimed too much time!<br /><br />Now this story is absolutely delicious. You've certainly taken the trouble to adhere to the guidelines. I love that you used the audition suggestion and you've dealt with it so well. I saw the King's Speech and I adored it and I see echoes of what you point out here. Poor Daisy, being Swedish really didn't help her chances.<br /><br />You've made her such an alluring character, I hope you use her in more stories. I want her to get a part in a play soon! (And where did No. 15 get to?)<br /><br />Welcome back to RFW. So good to have you!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.com